I didn't need to sleep tonight, anyway
No. This belongs on YouTube, not Newgrounds. This is an animation portal, not a timelapse portal.
Also, you have a dank song in your video and don't even put it in the link? Dude, send me dat shit
I'm gonna be honest. This animation is fantastic. It's wonderfully done and emotiful, but it is poorly used- nay, completely WASTED on stupid stuff like this. FNAF has no potential for fan stories, and much less you just made a music video. Stop that.
Make something original! No fanfic, no whiny bad music, no FNAF, just make something original, and I guarantee if you put in the effort, it'll be pretty good.
well i really wasn't trying to make a fan story if thats what you think,I just really wanted to use that song for something,sorry.
what the fuck did I just watch
I'm just gonna ignore the actual thing and talk about your art. I've seen some of your earlier stuff, and it was *okay*. Now, you're pretty much doing the same thing, and I think you may not be taking this that seriously, which isn't bad, but I think any room to improve should be used.
Your art has improved, definately, as you've started putting more detail into your characters and actually have a *style*, but your lining and shading needs improvement. I think it's mainly a matter of putting more effort into the characters, speaking of which...
You should just put more effort into your videos, period. Stock sounds I've heard before and three frame animations played over two minutes is really draining, and that makes up most of your videos. I'm not saying you NEED to go make your own sounds, but hearing that monster make the same two-second sound for a minute is annoying, and that 'dundundundunDUNDUN' clip is overplayed as hell.
TL;DR, put more effort and more detail, and your shit can be pretty good.
I've lost at least thirty brain cells from watching this
animation was -tolerable-, voice acting was meh (crying was terrible), sounds were retarded, and what the fuck overall.
I could eat a bucket of molten plastic and shit out better animation than this
The acting was alright, though. The main bad parts are that it's so very boring and the camera work is poorly done. For a stopmotion done in your house, I guess it's OK, but I have seen a lot better and frankly the animation, audio quality, and photography require practice. I recommend setting up an actual prop room, with a green screen or something.
I recommend NOT doing more of this, as these plots are really stupid. Do satire, make fun of the characters, have starscream ask megatron why he found schoolgirl torture porn under his bed, or have hotrod take a shit on bumblebee's head. Do something funny!
Well, now I feel, um... Kinda depressed, actually. It's not the result of this, I've just been going through some unimportant yet consequential stuff due to stupid decisions I've made, and something like this just puts the thought in my mind that practically nothing will happen once I'm gone. My family and friends will move on, my possessions will go to someone else, animals will keep dying, and the earth will still keep spinning.
I dunno. I should go to bed. Really nice job on this, though. Loved the art and your voice.
Hey man, i'm glad you liked it. Listen, for real though, please please please, just hang in there and things will improve. Like, I don't know how depressed you're really feeling, and I know i'm just a stranger to you, but your life matters and you are important to a lot of people, so please just keep on going.
My film is named third law in reference to Newton's third law (with every action there is an equal and opposite reaction). Every action matters. Everything you do causes something else. I did not intend to imply that things will move on without you, but that things move BECAUSE of you, and thats a good thing.
Keep on keeping on man. Thanks for enjoying.
I see potential. It was wasted, though.
There's definately many ways you could go with this, but this isn't really that good. The animation moves nice, but the actual material is sloppy, the cinematography is garbage, and it looks like it was made in 2004. It does look like there was effort put in, however.
The only thing I can suggest is to give it a story that consists of more than 5 words and an implied setting. If you're going for a Mirror's Edge kinda thing, don't fuck it up with a bullshit "Oh there's a government and they're being mean waaah" setting. If you are going for a minimalistic story, than you went to minimal. I do appreciate that things are left up to speculation, but nothing makes sense. Why is the lady in black running fast with an angry face? Why is the lady in blue trying to kill her? What did the thing at the end mean? Clarity would be nice.
If the story isn't the biggest part, the big part should be the action. I like the shot where she slammed into the one dude, but that was the only cool part. If you're going to be slicing Helicopters, at least give her a sword or a definable weapon/means of killing. The most important part of an action series with sci-fi elements is explosions. Definitely add more explosions.
In general, you should go more for a vibe of badassery instead of 'running running running sloppy boobs running blood'. I, personally, don't want to see a badass character ruined by wishy-washy blushing or by having big boobs. I want to see the lady in black murdering everything in her path whilst not looking at the explosions, and getting into epic and treacherous situations. I don't want to see an "oh kim-senpai" moments.
I'n still not sure who Kim is. The lady in black, right? I hope it is.
It has potential, but very lacking. I like what you're doing, and some moments were funny, but the audio cutouts are annoying, the animation is okay, the dialogue is monotonous, and it's just SO boring.
It does seem like an imitation of Edd's World, with the way everyone treats each other, and the things in the background... :I
But, if you just improve the flow of the conversations, fix the animation errors and odd stuff, get a better mic, and make it more interesting, I see things, kid. THINGS.
OH MY FUCKING GOD THAT WAS AMAZING. I would talk about why, but... just read the below comments. My day has been made better by 1000000%. Thank you.
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